Daniel Ellis

For this draft we reseaved feedback that the dialogue was better but still needed work towards the end and that we should still try and make the story a little longer.

 

we also decided to look at a tempery tittle of "loyalty lies". this is to reference the gang that Rob is in and that is loyaltys should lie there but they should also lie with his family. we also so thought that having the word lie would be a forshadowing in that his friend lied to him and killed his family.